Practicing, help?

It was another sunny and quiet day. He was prowling on a breezy sunny day as he saw another cat as Leo returned to the promise land. When he came back he met numerous other felines. He had come back cautious but the other cats and kittens were comfortable cause they recognized the name and scar in his right cheek.

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Practicing is a wonderful thing~
Let me show you another, juicy version of this post =)

It was another shining and silent day as he was prowling on-wards throughout the breezy day. He saw another cat as he passed through the lands. Leo returned to the promise land, when he came back it was nearly high moon. As he returned he met many felines near the high rock of his home. The felines greeted him because he was there king, a warrior whom they were so pleased with. As they greeted Leo, it was obvious that each feline had high respect for him. The felines were of great importance to Leo since they were like family. He had come back cautious but the other cats and kittens were comfortable cause they recognized the name and scar in his right cheek.

Conquerer Can you see the changes? What I did was add in some words and take some away~ Also in some places there are now commas instead of periods! Amazing huh?! What you need to do is think of some things, put in the proper punctuation and wala! But, let me teach you these things in a simple way! ^^

It was another {sunny and quiet day 1}. He was prowling on a {breezy sunny day as he saw another cat as Leo returned to the promise land. 2 } { When he came back he met numerous other felines. 3} He had come back cautious but the other cats and kittens were comfortable cause they recognized the name and scar in his right cheek.

So here we go~

{Sunny and quiet day 1} that's the first one, while it is correct... we can always spice things up! Using words that mean the same thing but sound different will always catch your readers attention. So changing the simple words to something more soothing and fitting in that sentence is always a good idea. Now you don't have to make repeats of these words... and if you can't find a word you like and see fitting in the sentence then you can always look up a list online =)

{Sunny and quiet day 1} Changing it~ In order to grab the readers attention you may phrase the sentence differently or add words or take away.
It was another {sunny and quiet day 1}. this can be changed to different and more advanced sentence by adding or taking away words.
{It was another shining and silent day, the wind blew through just as silent as a leaf drops to the ground.}
By adding these words it makes the sentence seem stunning. That is what is called 'Adding details.' It means you take more useful words and add them in. It also helps if you ask the questions "Who, Where, When, Why, and How." I know that those questions helped me get better posts out ^-^


#2:
{breezy sunny day as he saw another cat as Leo returned to the promise land. 2 }
There are repeats and some grammar issues in this sentence! Oh no! But don't worry~ These things can be easily fixed and changed to your liking!
{breezy sunny day as he saw another cat as Leo returned to the promise land. 2 } Changing this so it makes sense~
First off we need to get the grammar back into it's place! *shoves Grammar into it's place*

{breezy sunny day as he saw another cat as Leo returned to the promise land. 2 } vs. {breezy sunny day, as he saw another cat when walking through the lands he decided it was time to return to the promise land. 2} As you can see there is a new comma added and fresh words that fix the sentence~
Now you can change the sentence to however you please! It can be like this ^ or perhaps something entirely new! Always re-read what you type out/write, correct any mistakes you see and make sure when you read something it makes sense! That will make anyone reading automatically want to reply or continue reading work from you! ^^


{ When he came back he met numerous other felines. 3} This can be added to or simply left alone. It is simple and pleasing to the readers eye, buut~ we can always ask the question "Why, When, Who, Where, and how?" Starting with "Who are the other felines? Were they of importance? Where did he meet these felines on his way back? When did he return? Afternoon or Evening? How did the felines get along with Leo?
Once these question are asked, it's time to answer them in that post/thread/sentence/paragraph. This can also be changed to more then one sentence.

{ When he came back it was nearly high moon, and as he returned he met many felines near the high rock of his home. The felines greeted him because he was there king, a warrior whom they were so pleased with. As they greeted Leo, it was obvious that each feline had high respect for him. The felines were of great importance to Leo since they were like family.}
In that above ^ it answers all the questions but in a manner that entertains the reader.

Who are the other felines? The other felines he met were his faithful followers.
Were they of importance? The felines were of great importance to Leo since they were like family.
Where did he meet these felines on his way back? They met Leo at the High Rocks.
When did he return? Afternoon or Evening? Into the late night, evening.
How did the felines get along with Leo? They adored and respected Leo.

Now these questions can be answered in your way! Maybe Leo isn't a king~ Perhaps he's a rogue~ It takes only your imagination to release a beautiful answer as such~
Now it's your turn! Let me give you a sentence or Paragraph and lets see the wonders you can do with it~

Rose walked across the forest. Her amber eyes catching every detail that passed her by. The birds sang as she went to face her fate, the fate that no one else had dealt with.

Remember to ask the questions "Who, Where, When, Why, What and How."
Why was she going to face her fate? What was her fate? How come no one else had dealt with it? Where was she, deep in the forest but where? When was it that all this happened? How come she was watching every detail?
These questions can be answered by putting them into the sentence/paragraph/post/thread~ ^^
Hope this what you wanted <3